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WIP Sky Lightbolt Something Shut UPDATED? by TheWrongestTrousers WIP Sky Lightbolt Something Shut UPDATED? by TheWrongestTrousers
Work in Progress.

Look, a thing in Hotel Dusk style, but without shading. Tell me what's wrong with it, since this is done purely from scratch, unlike the other ponies.

Yeah, I know the hair flips out, (that'll be fixed in final). I also know that I forgot her damn wings... deal with it (something I'm going to have to do.)

No seriously, what's wrong with it so I can fix it. Guys, tell me. I can handle criticism. I'm getting desperate for criticism.

EDIT: Updated a couple things. Hair isn't so wacky anymore. Ear is somewhat fixed. ADDED WINGS. Still trying to think of ways to animate teeth proper without taking any more time devoted to them.
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Pweanut Jan 6, 2013
trowzuhs. u must use dah force to graft wingz on dat stuff

No, in all serious this is really good so far. the only thing I guess you could say is that the jaw area looks kind of funky. might just be me.
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TheWrongestTrousers Jan 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Yeah, luckily with layers I can just snap that crap on BLAP BLAP I'M THE BEST.

It's definitely a non-standard pony jaw. It's also a very odd one that needs polishing.
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CellularSP Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The only problem I can see is that towards the beginning the mouth/nose area seems a bit off. If that makes sense, probably not.
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TheWrongestTrousers Jan 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I see what you mean, it's a mixture of it not looking like a standard pony snout thing (that the right term) and the little eye sag making it look really off. Mostly the former.

Imma rework that...
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The things you mentioned are the only problems that I can notice. The mouth feels kind of like it's missing a frame, but that might just be me! I'm so terrible at giving critiques... mostly because I'm constantly in awe of how everyone is more talented than me. XD
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TheWrongestTrousers Jan 6, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Ah, you're right... I hadn't noticed the mouth. It needs one more frame before complete teeth clenching, it seems... maybe? I'll mess around until it looks smoother.

I think you can still manage critiques, even if you think you're not so tight with the visual arts. Especially with animation... little, weird inconsistencies are easier to note when the thing's moving.
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Horny-Eunuchorn Jan 6, 2013
I agree with the mouth thing. Also I think the line in her hair just left of her chest moves a little too fast. Maybe add another frame, it was just a little jarring for me. Also the little lick in her hair seems to jut out really quickly before she does any real dramatic movement
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TheWrongestTrousers Jan 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Yeah, nice catch, that's another thing I hadn't noticed, for some reason.

That lick is going to be the death of me, somehow. I just know it's going to look wrong until the very final bits of polishing.

Pure free-hand no help from anything's a lot quicker, more fun and more prone to screw-ups. I like it!
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MTHERULERMAN Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOT SHEE SEEIN
LOOKZ LIEK SUMFINK REELEE BADD
I HOAP NOWUN DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAID
I LAID
I WUNT DETH
NOT ENUFF OF IT RESSENTLEE
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TheWrongestTrousers Jan 6, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Nah, she's just trying to look hot.
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